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to: replace
Within the first thirty years of owning a house, homeowners can count on having to: replace several major appliances, put on a new roof, contract for termite treatment, and pay about a third of their income each year for the privilege of dealing with all these problems.
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A weakness that Kinsey displays is fragility
A weakness that Kinsey displayed was how fragile he was
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Since it was damaged in the line of duty, the police officer's torn uniform was replaced.
Since it was damaged in the line of duty, the torn police officer's uniform was replaced
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The criminal justice system has ethical flaws.
The criminal justice system is messed up.
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Nick Naylor IS a fictional spokesperson for the Academy of Tobacco Studies as the face representing Big Tobacco.
Nick Naylor was a fictional spokesperson for the Academy of Tobacco Studies as the face representing Big Tobacco.
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Kinsey is a scientist, which
Kinsey is a scientist which not only gives him logical ideas, but also credibility
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He claims that a class for such people would lower the rate of STDs.
He claims that by having a class for such people, it would improve the rate of STDs.
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After using the hidden house key, I returned it to where I found it.
After I used it, I returned the hidden house's key to where I found it.
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Generalization:
X% of Americans are overweight. Violent criminals are dangerous X% of criminals convicted as violent criminals are dangerous
Americans are overweight.
Criminals are dangerous. |
(Given his personal experience with smoking,) Naylor argues by attacking his opponent.
Naylor argues a point he has by attacking against anyone opposing him as he has much experience with tobacco from smoking
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Naylor asks several questions to the little girl:...
"...she”?
Naylor asks several questions to the little girl, “Really? Now is your mommy a doctor? A scientific researcher of some kind? She doesn’t exactly sound like a credible expert now does she”? (Reitman)
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Logos, or the appeal to logic, refers to persuasion by means of reason reason.
Logos, or the appeal to logic, means to convince an audience by use of reason.
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dangling modifier: In the mid-1900s, Kinsey goes on a journey to further his research on human sexuality
Taking place in the mid-1900s, Kinsey goes on a journey of persuasion to further his research on human sexuality
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Nurses who work with a patient who is very ill need to be patient.
When you work with a patient who is very ill, you need to be patient.
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Naylor uses bold, daring statements as a distraction to defend the tobacco industry.
Naylor used bold, daring statements as a distraction when it comes to defending tobacco
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"Yesterday," John said, "This afternoon I'll bring back your book Conflict in the Middle East"; however, he did not return it
Yesterday, John said, This afternoon I'll bring back your book Conflict in the Middle East; however, he did not return it
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The key to a successful debate is the incorporation of ethos, pathos logos into an argument
--> Incorporating ethos, pathos, logos in an argument is to a successful debate.
The key to a successful debate is by incorporating ethos, pathos and logos into your argument
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He must convince his investors to continue funding his research, by using ethos, logos and pathos.
Through the use of ethos, pathos and logos, Kinsey must convince his investors to continue funding his research.
He must convince his investors to continue funding his research by using ethos, logos and pathos.
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Despite my diet, I have not lost (any) weight.
In spite of the fact that I am on a diet, I have not lost any weight.
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By using pathos, he is able to access the emotions of his audience to understand his reasoning better.
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"Whoever is elected secretary of the club--Ashley, or Chandra, or Aisha--must be prepared to do a great deal of work," said Jumita, the previous secretary.
Whoever is elected secretary of the club Ashley, or Chandra, or Aisha must be prepared to do a great deal of work, said Jumita, the previous secretary
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The teacher knew of but ignored the student's plan to cheat.
The teacher knew but ignored the student's plan to cheat.
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Using pathos, Nick Naylor attempts to convince the pubic to smoke, and shows that the use of tobacco does not necessarily cause cancer.
Nick Naylor attempts to convince the public to smoke and show that the usage of tobacco does not necessarily cause cancer by using pathos
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“Following the Civil War, the harsh reality of overcoming institutionalized prejudice against blacks was that acquiring the respect of oppressive whites and lawmakers was the first step in establishing social equality
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He decides to deflect these opposing viewpoints by coming up with the following quote, “As a matter of fact, we’re about to launch a $50 million campaign aimed at persuading kids not to smoke” (Reitman).
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